I don't know if it's a great idea to get rid of the training part. I think that's one of the few things that keeps this film from being horribly depressing. You focus on the negative parts a lot. Not that that's exactly wrong since you want to pull at people's heartstrings, but I don't think it's good for the whole movie to just be sad and depressing.
As far as your paper edit goes as a whole, even though it's not completely complete, I think you've got a great foundation going. You've got it almost beat by beat which is going to make your life SO much easier!
I think you are looking good here Courtney. Dont be so hard on yourself with this Paper Edit, as it is so early in the game right now... you dont really have much to work with in terms of Video/ Audio elements.
I agree with Sandra a bit on the whole training scene... this film has a really good message/ story, but it is a MAJOR bummer, and you need as much "good" as you can get in there!
Also, I feel like these is not enough "substance" here for a full on story. I think maybe you should try and follow a few different dogs, each a different age and see how people react with them all. Also, what happened to getting the POV's of all the different people (the dog haters and lovers)... I cant remember if Adam wanted you to scrap this or not?
Sorry for such vague comments... let me know in class if you want more details!
Hey Courtney, I think you've done a wonderful job so far. I like the opening shot, time lapse, and the stephanie and carol interviews. The beginning just breaks your heart because "Buddy" is locked in a cage and has to see family after family not choose him. So for that reason I'd keep the training sequence so that the film's not too depressing. Plus I think it's important to show that "Buddy" can interact with the outside world and not attack everything in sight. How long did you want this to be? But I think your format is really well done: intro to buddy, intercutting interviews, and training then back to the sheltor. What you could do is find a pit bull owner and interview them, so that way you have proof of what Stephanie is talking about. Talk to them about stereotypes, so they can disagree and they know because they actually have a pit bull. Yea there are pit bull haters, but there are also pit bull lovers and those owners would do anything for their dogs. But this is a job well done!
I would say keep the training parts for the same reasons dominique mentioned. You need something to break up the sad parts of the film. Perhaps you could follow a dog that is getting the proper training and has a loving family and break that up throughout the film to contrast with others who claim they are a dangerous breed.
It seems like you have this extremely organized and it is very well thought out. I don't have much to add that other comments haven't already addressed but since you posed the question, I agree with the others that the training should stay. I was already sad just reading about how Buddy watches families pass him everyday in the shelter so something positive and uplifting is a must. I think you have a good foundation and the paper edit is really good. Sorry I dont have more to comment on but I think you have it all figured out already! Good work!
Still planning on following multiple "Buddys" and deciding when you go into post which one to use?
I think it would be neat if at the end, after the titles of Buddy's fate are read on screen, you go back to the last shot that you had of Buddy on screen and do the card cutting again with a billion other pictures of dogs, just to once again hit home that this is the life of sooooo many dogs.
just reading that made me sad, good job. i like erica's idea about hitting home the idea that so many dogs go through this, i would still like to see more "expert" opinion in the sections you had for "more interview", like an interview with a vet, a shelter worker, or someone who has owned a lot of pitts, or someone who once gave away a pitt.
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ReplyDeleteat this point i don't feel my paper edit is strong enough, i know it is incredibly vague at times.
I want to really focus on stereotypes and im not sure if i should boot the training parts (even though that is extremely important)
i would like to know what you all thought was unnecessary, and id also like to know what you think should be added. thanks!
I don't know if it's a great idea to get rid of the training part. I think that's one of the few things that keeps this film from being horribly depressing. You focus on the negative parts a lot. Not that that's exactly wrong since you want to pull at people's heartstrings, but I don't think it's good for the whole movie to just be sad and depressing.
ReplyDeleteAs far as your paper edit goes as a whole, even though it's not completely complete, I think you've got a great foundation going. You've got it almost beat by beat which is going to make your life SO much easier!
I think you are looking good here Courtney. Dont be so hard on yourself with this Paper Edit, as it is so early in the game right now... you dont really have much to work with in terms of Video/ Audio elements.
ReplyDeleteI agree with Sandra a bit on the whole training scene... this film has a really good message/ story, but it is a MAJOR bummer, and you need as much "good" as you can get in there!
Also, I feel like these is not enough "substance" here for a full on story. I think maybe you should try and follow a few different dogs, each a different age and see how people react with them all. Also, what happened to getting the POV's of all the different people (the dog haters and lovers)... I cant remember if Adam wanted you to scrap this or not?
Sorry for such vague comments... let me know in class if you want more details!
Hey Courtney, I think you've done a wonderful job so far. I like the opening shot, time lapse, and the stephanie and carol interviews. The beginning just breaks your heart because "Buddy" is locked in a cage and has to see family after family not choose him. So for that reason I'd keep the training sequence so that the film's not too depressing. Plus I think it's important to show that "Buddy" can interact with the outside world and not attack everything in sight. How long did you want this to be? But I think your format is really well done: intro to buddy, intercutting interviews, and training then back to the sheltor. What you could do is find a pit bull owner and interview them, so that way you have proof of what Stephanie is talking about. Talk to them about stereotypes, so they can disagree and they know because they actually have a pit bull. Yea there are pit bull haters, but there are also pit bull lovers and those owners would do anything for their dogs. But this is a job well done!
ReplyDeleteI would say keep the training parts for the same reasons dominique mentioned. You need something to break up the sad parts of the film. Perhaps you could follow a dog that is getting the proper training and has a loving family and break that up throughout the film to contrast with others who claim they are a dangerous breed.
ReplyDeleteCourtney,
ReplyDeleteIt seems like you have this extremely organized and it is very well thought out. I don't have much to add that other comments haven't already addressed but since you posed the question, I agree with the others that the training should stay. I was already sad just reading about how Buddy watches families pass him everyday in the shelter so something positive and uplifting is a must. I think you have a good foundation and the paper edit is really good. Sorry I dont have more to comment on but I think you have it all figured out already! Good work!
Still planning on following multiple "Buddys" and deciding when you go into post which one to use?
ReplyDeleteI think it would be neat if at the end, after the titles of Buddy's fate are read on screen, you go back to the last shot that you had of Buddy on screen and do the card cutting again with a billion other pictures of dogs, just to once again hit home that this is the life of sooooo many dogs.
just reading that made me sad, good job. i like erica's idea about hitting home the idea that so many dogs go through this, i would still like to see more "expert" opinion in the sections you had for "more interview", like an interview with a vet, a shelter worker, or someone who has owned a lot of pitts, or someone who once gave away a pitt.
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